ITC105 blog post
Who wrote the better essay and why?
Personally I think John Doe wrote the better essay. This is
not based on his technical skill but rather, in part, on Janes inability to
remain coherent and the difficulty I had making sense of her point.
Whilst Jane definitely has the better researched and sourced
essay she appears to be trying too hard to convince us that she has more
writing skills than she actually does, a few examples are:
·
In the first paragraph she directly
quotes Kohl and Karisch as saying “we think it serves a purpose to reveal the complexity of real-world
crew rostering to readers without industrial knowledge of the problem”, this
quote has no relation to the preceding sentence and only loosely relates to the
paragraph it’s supposed to support.
·
Some very poorly
structured sentences, a good example being “Airlines
in North America work on anonymous rosters (called “bidlines”) and then are
assigned to individuals based on bids for these anonymous rosters”, this
sentence literally says that Airlines in America are assigned to individuals
based on bids for anonymous rosters.
In my opinion Johns use of language and his recount like
formatting make his essay easier to read than Janes. This is probably due to
the way that his reads like it was spoken.
That's all for now.
